Pages 1-5 (Eccl. 1:2-8a)

Posted on July 8, 2012, in Rough Drafts and tagged . Bookmark the permalink. 7 Comments.

  1. it would help to number each cell for our referencing
    try to move beyond the male pronouns for the teacher – “man” “his labor” to what do people gain from all their work

  2. most excellent feedback. thanks! I can make both of those changes.

  3. iPads and IRAs do fit together in the shape of the words and look good next to each other, but would the same person want both of these things (along with “clothes”?)

  4. You caught me. I was being lazy and didn’t want to make individual word balloons for each speaker. But you’re right….each noun fits a different character. I’ll divvy them up in the next draft. Thanks!

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